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Did I do it right?
Did I do it fine?
Waiting for your answer
But I'm running out of time.

Did I do it right?
Did I do it well?
I keep asking Mom
But even she can't always tell.

Did I do it right?
Did I do it great?
I wanna ask you out loud
But you're watching the news.
So I'll wait.

Waiting for your praise!
Waiting for the days
When you'll say “I love you” sans conditions!
Waiting for the time
When you'll say “you're doing fine!”
Waiting for “I love you” sans conditions!

Did I do it right?
Did I do it fine?
Waiting for your answer
But I'm running out of time.

Did I do it right?
Did I do it well?
Staring at the damage
In my own small slice of hell.

Did I do it right?
Did I do it great?
Maybe one day you'll say it out loud
But I think that by then
It'll be too late.

Did I do it right?
Did I do it fine?
Lying in bed writing
And I'm running out of time.

Did I do it right?
Did I do it well?
My eyes are slowly closing
And the darkness fell.

[spoken] Goodnight, Dad. I love you.

My eyes are slowly closing
And the darkness fell.
Goodnight.
This is not a FoN song. I just started humming it and coming up with lyrics this evening.
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Mayaj Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008
Okay, I seriously love this one. Painful.
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
:blushes:
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner May 22, 2008
This is freakin' awesome...
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner May 24, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks... it's... *trying to think of what song sounds like it*

it sounds a little like Chasing Cars... maybe I'll get the music down, zip it and put it up here.
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner May 25, 2008
Heh, yeah, I can hear that...

That would be AWESOME.
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner May 26, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Music files are prohibited--a friend of mine put up recordings of his own songs and they were taken down. but once I get a chance to fiddle with Finale Notepad (free composing program, it's le sweet) i'll email the songs to whoever wants to hear them.
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner May 26, 2008
Aw, that's too bad... Still, at least we get to hear.
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner May 26, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah.
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